After having some time to edit and redraft other people’s work, it was time to apply these skills to our own work. We were given time to start working through our plot point so we could uplevel it. This is a skill we’ve been working hard on this year and still find it a little tricky especially as we feel we did a good job the first time round. However, we know there is always room for improvement.
Last week, we spent some time revisiting editing and redrafting out writing. We were shown examples of work from books and then we worked together to edit for things like punctuation and sense. Once we were happy we had completed the editing, we worked together to redraft which could have considered of added a fronted adverbial, conjunction or adding further description.
Once Noah had got all of the animals on the ark they all sat bored and did not know what to do, they did not have anywhere to run or play. Some of them were laid down and others were sat sulking.
Today I was absolutely blown away by the beautiful work Crew Godley produced in writing. We wrote our second plot point of our story, All Afloat Noah’s Boat. Noah was getting soaked by the rain and had to usher all the animals onto the boat, it wasn’t an easy task!
Today we continued to write our stories…
Today in our experience lesson we went into the ark 2 by 2!
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After being Noah last week and making the ark for the animals, our next bit of writing was Noah getting all of the animals onto the ark to stay out of the rain. Noah rang his bell loudly and shouted for all of the animals to come onto his ark, they went on in 2 by 2. We were fab at acting out the animals and their different movements!
Now that we’ve finished our plot points, it’s time to edit and redraft some of our writing. In our writing lesson on Friday, we were shown some examples of writing from children’s books and we were shown how to edit a piece of work. Then we had an opportunity to work through some sentences and share our thoughts with the rest of the class. Next, we’ll look at redrafting and have time to redraft our own writing so we can uplevel it.
During our writing lesson, we’ve been discussing the importance of proofreading our writing. Before completing our plot point, we swapped books and provided some praises and wonders to help our partners move their learning forward.
Today in our writing lesson, we took part in a second experience day. This one all focussed around the touch, taste and smell lenses as this is what we will be including in our PP4 chunk. We tried a variety of sweets and built up our vocabulary ready to use on Monday.
